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Journey by the train every day is crazy. For regular commuter can be a typical
experience and one gets so used to it that can almost predict what happens
next. its people everywhere, some orderly, some pushing, some but all moving
towards a destination like being possessed. All your hearing is "excuse me",
"sorry", " thank you " when passing through people. Ahhh!
The life of a commuter; is a real struggle every day. Daily I have to set my
alarm 2 hours prior to my regular alarm time to get a class on time. If I don't
set an alarm, I will be rushing to train station running with my bags dragging
on the ground. The worst part is sometimes when you rushing to get on the train
and it pulls off soon as you get on track. Now, I'm out of breath, feeling like
my heart is about to come out my chest.
The gates are shutting
automatically as the train is about to take me on a wild roller coaster ride. As
the train moves, turns, we all are shoving us against each other, for the brief
of a 45-minute journey we are all one unit. Our shudders to a close to each
other, the brake throwing us forward one of other as if to snap us out of our
mass hypnosis. At this point, you either give way or you are carried with the
crowd. The only choice is to resist or evade. The morning train journey is a
version in miniature of modern day life when people is sweaty, confused and it
sometimes stinks but you take the ride anyway.
After being on the train
for 20 – minutes now and finally have a seat and you can't really focus on your
homework because of crying baby or group of friends talking loud. Now I’m
questioning myself how can people invade each other’s personal space, and yet
act uninterested? All I can do is breath in & out trying to balance my bags
between my legs. 2 more stops until Rutgers the coordinator said on the loud
speaker.
Finally, !!! off the
train and walking on College Ave. It’s so many people waiting for bus at Scott
Hall. The LX comes and it’s a lot people
is running to get on this one little bus now I’m thinking not this again; I just
want a break. standing at bus stops all you hear is weird sounds from shuttles
because half of them be broke down. They say buses run as often as every 3-9
minutes during peak periods on weekdays but they lied I have waited 20 minutes
for a bus before. They also say depending on where you are going, the average
bus rides ranges anywhere from 5 to 15 minutes which is another lie you will be
waiting for drivers for like 10 minutes because they want to take long breaks
and now you running late for class. Moral of story is I’m tired of commuting I just
need to buy me a car.
Dear Terranni,
ReplyDeleteI like the details of the daily commute--how it's claustrophobic, frustrating, slow---though now I'm wondering if you've shifted your focus from the big sister idea? You can still change your mind, but if you are going to do something about how much you hate communting, you have to provide some insight more than that it's just annoying. We all know it's annoying--it's why so many people drive instead, even though that can be frustrating. What insight can you offer about this experience? What is it like? Is it like purgatory? Is it just one example of what can be difficult in daily life, similar to waiting in line at the check-out counter like we saw in This is Water? Keep your audience in mind--why should we care about your commuter experience? What's in it for your viewer? This could be a very interesting piece, if told from your experience, and possibly if told with another purpose in mind. There are people I know who have never once been on public transportation. It's possible that you could make this video for them...Let them see what it's really like...As for the video, I like that you added this zippy music--images are somewhat blurred though, not sure why. Let's talk more about which topic you think you'd like to pursue so you can focus in.